Friday, April 22, 2011

DAY 21 - PA PROMPT "SECOND THOUGHTS " - POEM 2.  - On Kaitlin - Murdered-Four-Year-Old

No second thoughts play
at the child in mud leafed sprawl
Spring awakening 


  1. I read the poem before the title - then I had a great urge to edit it to read

    'No second thoughts play
    round the child in leafed-mud sprawl.
    Death, not Spring, awakes.'

    Do hope you don't mind my sharing this thought? You created such a strong image in my mind...

  2. Oh Jinksy.....not only don't I mind I am delighted....actually people over at Poetic Asides where i' 've been submitting almost exclusively for last few years came to know " Kaitlin" very well... If you ' re interested click on the Kaitlin series...would love to know your thoughts! Actually " Kaitlin" appeared and found her way into a novel I wrote in November for NaNoWriMo challenge

    I DO like your edit! Thanks again for visiting, reading and taking enough interest to offer an edit!