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| jks Lola |
Girls in Plum Sweaters
what can girls in plum sweaters
be expected to know of loss
as they pass the shovel among friends -
unorated letters on pretty stationary drift
in the wind - as earth hard-hits the coffin
inside - sweatered pruning friend on white satin -
outside they - fresh as dropped stitches
from a single skein of yarn
knitting a forever hole
girls in plum sweaters,
dirt under fingernails
cold wind in their
fresh washed hair
There seems to be a funereal theme to the wordle poems today. I hope you're feeling more cheerful!
ReplyDeleteExcellent, Pearl. I love the twist -- using the words both 'plum' and 'prune.' Many wonderful images! Happy new year to you!
ReplyDeleteI never would have seen this in the wordle, Pearl, but you brought a sad scene into focus with vivid clarity. A powerful piece; well written.
ReplyDeleteCaptivating title and opening line, Pearl. I think I'll never view plum sweaters the same again.
ReplyDeleteI hadn't been back to read .... Interesting though ... After writing I went back to the original poem to see if that was the theme...I do believe the combination of the words shovel, losss and perhaps wi d kicked off an association. :)
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ReplyDeleteThanks Traci ... I'm not sure I enjoyed seeing this on the words but there they were in the word plum .... Happy New Year!
ReplyDeleteAww... Thanks Laurie... Mhmmm sorry about the plum sweaters :). Happy New Year! Back to read in a bit.
ReplyDeleteYou and I seem to have been on similar tracks. I was amused to see the words which we used for the same results.
ReplyDeleteMy first visit. I enjoyed the poem and the images conjured by your words.
margo
Wordles are a favorite part of my week! Will get over to your site and see your take. Thanks for the visit :)
ReplyDeletegirl friends in matching plum sweaters must be the best of all friends.
ReplyDeleteI like the contrast of plum and prune!
ReplyDeleteoh Pearl, this is fantastic... the images resonate
ReplyDeleteWOW .... thank you Brenda ..,,I LOVE your WORDLES! I have no idea where these little story poems come from....the combination of words just fall together. Delighted you enjoyed ....your "fantastic" comment is a brilliant start for the New Year! Thank you again!
ReplyDeleteThis poem clutches at the throat! The first three lines hook the reader immediately. I have two teen-age daughter. Somehow this picture is gripping! Well done.
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