The Rich Woman's Daughter
My mother was an artist
In the shadows where bruises blossomed
Like tattooed bouquets
Unseen, hidden in the saunter of her silhouette
I, a child of three or four
Peering through sleep tangled tresses
Leaned into a cornered wall
and listened, lurching in lyric luminosity
Through thin walls of thick silent dark nights
My mother was an artist
With closed eyes, swaying hips sashaying
Barefooted in the sensuous way I knew only
As her 'ocean dance' - rising to embrace
A tall perfect partner visible only
to us - his arm around her
slim waist - his eyes soft
an Aubusson replacing the lineloum under her toes
My mother was an artist filling
those dark silent empty nights
with arcs of color as she danced and
finally, finally, the walls of silent suffering
melted as she sang in liquid lyricism
carefree as a songbird pouring
sweet sonneted alliteration songs
as I, a child of three or four
watched and loved and learned
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ReplyDeleteThank you Walt - found that I had to repeatedly quiet the image of your beautiful poem... :)
ReplyDeletereally like
ReplyDeleteIn the silence of her suffering
In the shadows where bruises blossomed
Like tattooed bouquets
Unseen, hidden in the saunter of her silhouette
very nice use of the language
Thank you ... I have no idea why my reply to you at the time did not post - please accept my apology and thank you for stopping and commenting :)
DeleteI read it twice. It really got into me. Beautiful work...
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Oh thank you so very very much - Your words mean a great deal to me.
DeleteLovely storytelling here; and beautiful words. Thanks for taking part in Pantry. Here's mine:
ReplyDeletehttp://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2012/09/cold.html
I enjoyed reading your write!
ReplyDeleteOh Pearl, this is fantastic. It washed over me, and took me to a different place. A beautiful write!
ReplyDeleteAw Brenda - thank you so very much ... means a great deal to me. I adore these prompts and all thanks to you - I have been taken to many different places ! :)
DeleteBeautiful lyrics... The feeling has been depicted very nicely
ReplyDelete"Walls of silent suffering" take out the essence very uniquely.
Wow, I can SEE your mother, dancing, swaying, dreaming....mesmerizing piece. Love the repeated lines which SO totally work!
ReplyDeleteOh thank you Sherry - but not at all autobiographical in my true physical life - my actual mother would have slugged anyone who touched her! :) (perhaps in some parallel Universe) Delighted that you enjoyed :)
DeleteA poem that engages the senses and illustrates the loving connections between daughters and mothers, women and men,side-by-side with life's inevitable pain.
ReplyDeleteWow! Kim - that is quite a critique - if I only portrayed a part of what you've written I am delighted :) Thank you so very very much :)
DeleteThis seemed to me to be a powerful depiction of how an artist can beautify life...
ReplyDeleteIn the silence of her suffering
In the shadows where bruises blossomed
Like tattooed bouquets
Unseen, hidden in the saunter of her silhouette
and then how she colored the dark, empty nights... This was very well-written and gave me much to consider.
Aw Serena - A poem that you enjoyed and where you found sentiments worthy of consideration. It doesn't get much better than this for a writer/poet ... Thank you so very much :)
DeleteBeautiful work! Gorgeous sense of a lyrical retelling of this child's experiences---
ReplyDeleteAudrey - often the wordle words seem to flash me to places that although never seen are quite real - this was one of those - I am humbled by words like "gorgeous" Thank you so very much. :)
DeleteYour opening stanza made me think of the phrase "strong in the broken places". But your poem is lyrical and sings of balance and harmony to be found in even darkness. It pulls the reader in and holds her there taut and listening,thank you.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/09/16/attempted-alliteration/
Pearl you struck strong chords of emotion with this i love it
ReplyDeleteChris - thank you so very much - who among us does not wish to strike a "chord" thank you as I thank you deeply for the "love" expressed :)
DeleteOh Pearl, you continue to enthral me ... this is magical and paints such images; I totally forgot you were wordling; I love how you go from an almost sad, hopeless/helpless artistic soul to one who seems on thresh-hold of saving herself...the rhythm running throughout reminds me of some wonderful cello music ...(Bach's Sonata in C Major, I think ... but I'm guessing) Very cool none-the-less
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Oh Sharon - you always take me that extra mile - assuming a knowledge that if more than often not there - but very present in you - thank you for your beautiful comment and I am truly thrilled that you did enjoy. What comments! I am humbled
DeleteThanks for giving my words such a tender rendering, Pearl. I love what you've done with them.
ReplyDeleteI read this twice. It made me want to dance and cry at the same time.
ReplyDeleteSara ,Sara - no more powerful words can a writer read! Thank you - :)
DeleteI always find it striking (pardon the pun) when we fall into a poem making it personal when it was the wondrous magic of wordles that have lead us in a romantic dance with words...as your piece has done.
ReplyDeleteI'm here:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/09/sunday-whirl-74stroll.html
Oh yes.. Jules... I am always moved when something seems personal - a poetic re-telling of an actual event - when it the words of wordle that have reached out their hand and invited me to a"romantic dance with words" HOW BEAUTIFULLY PUT ! Sometimes - I do feel the need to reply that something is not autobiographical - but I suppose in a sense all the 'dances' that we move with words are parts of us -
DeleteThank you so very much for you comment and of course for stopping by and I shall stop by gems and stuff... :)