remote warriors
remote warriors in their fierce silence of suffering
and the children
shaken waiting with rugged grace for an absent blessing
and the children
lifting from the now, to a parallel splendor
lying legs safely sprawled akimbo
in emerald fields Elysian
as nursery cows contentedly low
and the children
fear not the fixed marble of that hand
raised in rage repeated
as innocence defiled yet again
and the children
rise as filamented phantoms flying on
remote
warriors in their fierce silence of suffering
soaring
I found this a little frightening. Not sure that is what you intended! Good use of the wordle words.
ReplyDeleteYes, for some reason the image that fell together from the words was one of children needing to escape in their own minds from awful circumstances... Yikes... Part of the reason I then wrote another - was the disturbing nature of what was "brought" to me. Thanks for stopping by. :)
ReplyDeleteI appreciate your response to Viv. The first piece you wrote evoked happy games of chase from my own childhood...especially the line "mugging fierce faces..." it made me laugh. I can see how this piece may have arisen from that first piece. I like this one a great deal, Pearl. Thank you for your continued support of The Sunday Whirl. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Brenda - I often say The Whirl has provided me with the only reason other than a nursing infant for waking early and expectantly joyful on a Sunday morning. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteAh, Pearl, your work shows in this disturbing one. I think we try hard to filter out others' realities when such painful potentials of innocence punished comes to the foreground. The pain of it smacks our minds too forcefully for our reactions to be easily attended to.
ReplyDeleteYet, such images, such words are necessary lest we overlook what can be changed/prevented through our own efforts. Thank you for sharing this.
I am an advocate (who could not be?) for children who have been harmed or had their innocence compromised in any way, shape or form. I am aware that often children have a 'remoteness' about them - an ability to 'cope' by disassociating and taking themselves to a 'happier' place - ... the wordle word "remote' triggered this association contrasted with the 'cows'... Disturbing, but well, there it was. Thanks for stopping by:)
DeleteI just watched The Hunger Games and both of your pieces reminded me of that for completely different reasons. I think, if we let them, the words take us to the places we most need to go. We might never know the reason and that's where the trust comes in,
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Yes, Elizabeth I think that 'wordles' do take me to places that I might not have imagined otherwise - I like your positive sense that these are the places where 'we most need to go" they certainly awaken a reveal flashes that come whole and apparently ready to be "transcribed." The sense of "trust" involved is something I had not thought about but is interesting and resonates - Thanks for stopping by :)
DeleteAnd all takes flight, in silence. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteDeeply appreciate your comments and your visits! :). Thank you !
ReplyDeleteThank you for speaking in behalf of the children.
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This is a very strong piece, Pearl. Well done.
ReplyDeleteStrong and emotive and you got the flow just right, it made the right indents in it's feeling
ReplyDeleteA chilling reality of what warring brings. Is there no escape?
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