Wednesday, September 12, 2012

September Heights - Day 13. Symphony



Day 13. Symphony



Walls tremble crashing
Blood bangs on crescendoed wave
Breathless on the shore



12 comments:

  1. Wow, very dramatic! The second line really packs a punch.

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  2. What a horrendous death they faced.
    A tough read.

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    1. Aw Happy - Always fascinating what others bring to what we write. I can think of many horrendous deaths that this haiku might evoke - yet they were not in my mind when writing. Thank you for stopping and being moved :)

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  3. I live near the ocean and feel the power of the heavy surf in your haiku! It is quite a symphony, Well done!

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  4. I'll comment myself later in the week on this one...

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  5. I like it, but I'm not sure why...I guess because there's a lot going on and I don't know what it is:)

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  6. wow, dramatic, indeed. it startled me :-) and it's lovely!

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  7. Let me guess: Vaughan Williams' Sea Symphony?

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  8. Such a crisp haiku sparking deeper thoughts!
    http://merlinspielen.com/2012/09/13/summer-symphony/

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