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| a href="http://www.publicdomainpictures.net/view-image.php?image=35494&picture=train-track">Train Track by lisa runnels |
Rumbled
There
over the horizon
the
rumble wafts on
wind
across the prairie
as the
train sounds smashes
the
vault, sprinting the safe-guarded
halls of
her heart – here as dust begins
to swirl
in delicious anticipation
tickling
her throat
twitching
her aching limbs
lithe,
nimble and throbbing in
restrained
rapture – the train whistle and
the sweet
smoke of its stacks
shake the
earth under
her
clenched toes and she surrenders
to the
Crave before he even jumps
from the
open door smiling into the wind
huge grin-in-long-journey-creased-khakis
pressed
each to each
In
longing, in lust, perhaps in love
Their
days of letters and virtual touch
Ended
I love the picture you painted with this scene, Pearl. Wonderful wordings, and a surprising ending!
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Hi Pearl, I hope you will be able to visit other poets this week. It seems many have decided to post links but not visit. It brings down morale when SO many do this week after week. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteHi Mary - thanks for the lovely comment ... I do hope your comment was sent out generally and not a personal missive and I do make it my business to wake early and respond before going back to my Sunday "sleep-in" :) Enjoy the day and thanks for visiting :)
DeleteLove lorn ....
ReplyDelete"In longing, in lust, perhaps in love" - hard to honestly separate sometimes.
ReplyDeleteI like this: "here as dust begins" ... And also the one-word title.
ReplyDeleteA long ride back home!! Return from call of duty into the waiting arms of the beloved!!
ReplyDeleteTheir days of letters and virtual touch
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Such a sad ending
first, i love the image of the train...i grew up around them and fell asleep to their calls..as much as the story you unfold in the after...the desire finally sated in their meeting...
ReplyDeleteThe sky diver image surprised me, and I liked it. Also like "pressed each to each." There are many ways to read this one. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteWow- masterfully done. These hearts can take us to dangerous places.
ReplyDeleteTrains are great when they bring somebody closer...
ReplyDeleteThis is a great, vivid ride, Pearl.
ReplyDeleteI like it....makes me think of the end of the war...?
ReplyDeleteQuite a train ride... and a surprise at the end of the ride!
ReplyDeleteA timeless and romantic piece, really wonderful.
ReplyDeleteYour words suggest much to the senses and layers of imagery. I too like the title. What follows is intriguing,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/06/02/awakening-a-body-once-living/
That fearful anticipation ending in joy what a stunning piece of imagery.
ReplyDelete...now that's quite a journey t'wards that long sought communion... i am glad they did find a way to meet... loved it... smiles...
ReplyDeleteOh, lovely and romantic....and happy! I can see them!
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem - love the final coda: such a great "rounding".
ReplyDeleteWhat a great story! Happy ending with them pressed together at last, finished with letters and internet touch being the only way to communicate. I really like this.
ReplyDeleteLove the imagery of the first few lines :) It took me there!
ReplyDeleteThis fabulous it really appealed to my senses, it wasn't just that I could visualize but I could really feel the words. Wonderful ending =)
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