He turned a silent sorry falling
from the place it should belong
trembling before the down turned faces
Of the beauty of sisters - the sweet round balloon
of his being now with a startling pop
Bust
Wrong
He was wrong
his hand in that proverbial
cookie jar pilfering their savings
in the deepest dark
until like the first dawn of the first fire
he was illuminated in beam of their
now dispossessed pride
And he
a small boy
lips trembling
in terror of their abandonment
Stared at the pawn ticket of their trust
Pleading forgiveness in a simple suggested
Unless
Oh my!! Pearl...your last stanza with that dangling "unless," love it!! Great write!!
ReplyDeleteAwww thank you Hannah - I had a little trouble with this one - I am delighted that you enjoyed:)
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ReplyDeleteAwww... I'm glad he saw the error of his ways. Hope he wasn't abandoned by them and that they redeem the pawn ticket.
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed this and yes, the final 'unless' ends it perfectly on a ... what happens next?
Oops, he got caught.....but a bit too late. I like the ending 'unless' which makes the reader ponder what then........ Well wordled.
ReplyDeleteI am amazed at your facility in using all of the prompt words to create such a wonderful poem. I loved "the sweet round balloon of his being"
ReplyDeleteI must try this type of prompt. Where did this group of words come from?
Beautifully written, Pearl. The small boy is a strong image, lips trembling....
ReplyDeleteWhoa... that ending does make me wonder.. I know I'm not the first to say it, and I doubt I'll be the last either, because that was quite unexpected, and it worked. :) Lovely.
ReplyDeleteer.. Sunday Whirl, Dr. Pearl? ;)
Very interesting tale you tell, just enough details to keep the reader in place, wondering, yet vivid enough to create images in the mind.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/11/18/burnt-sacrifice/
"stared at the pawn ticket of their trust".....great line.
ReplyDeleteYes, an interesting back-story there. Actually, you could expand this into a longer piece. A treat to peek into your imagination!
ReplyDeleteI especially like your first four lines.
ReplyDeleteWonderful what you did with this.
ReplyDeleteReally good, and I especially loved this phrase: "pawn ticket of their trust."
ReplyDeleteWhat an interesting take on the prompt! I read it several times to fully taste it :-)
ReplyDeleteSimply awe-inspiring, Pearl.
ReplyDeleteoh, I hope they can forgive him what he's done!
ReplyDeleteWonderful style and story.
ReplyDeleteDr. P Very mysterious and beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed your poem! The ending keeps me thinking of all different outcomes!
ReplyDeleteWonderful!
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