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| Full Moon by Bobbi Jones Jones Prompt by Khara House |
Full Moon
It would have been enough
to have a full moon
pulling the crested waves
to sandy shores
it would have been enough
to have a front chilled blow through
white caps in the bay
It would have been enough
to have the wind whip
Each singular, would have
sufficed
Coalesced
the bay reached
with a century long yearning
toward the touch of the ocean
with time removed as impediment
nothing would stand as obstacle as
they met in
crashing, crushing, sweeping
passionate embrace
with thought of no other
in the blind lust of
Sandy
Oh, Pearl. This is so well spilled.
ReplyDeleteHugs and prayers, from under that same waning moon.
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Aw - thank you De ... still writing from a hotel - but wonderful to have my own computer and all of you out there... (wait I feel like a like from Sunset Blvd.) :) Happy writing ... on to NaNo..
DeleteThis is an interesting view of such a big storm. It does seem alive,doesn't it, the ocean, in moments like that?
ReplyDeleteThanks Ina - yes the sea has always seemed alive to me - and this meeting of sea and bay - so unusual and devastating seemed somehow filled with unbridled and destructive (to others) passion.
DeleteThis is an interesting take on the storm. It's funny isn't it how sometimes the ocean seems alive, and as biological as we are?
ReplyDeleteAw - thank you De ... still writing from a hotel - but wonderful to have my own computer and all of you out there... (wait I feel like a like from Sunset Blvd.) :) Happy writing ... on to NaNo..
ReplyDeletePearl, wonderful! I love the last few lines...you build the tension beautifully.
ReplyDeleteI am posting some of my poems on my site and FB, too. Been having troubles posting on the PAD site. But, maybe that will change.
Good to read your poems! Blessings, Linda
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DeleteThank you Linda - I "love" love. Linda, the "new" PA site is so frustrating - I will visit you on your site. Are you doing NaNao as well?
DeletePearl I so like the repetition "It would have been enough"--just sums it up so well. Best :)
ReplyDeleteOh thank you Patricia - glad that you liked ... Best right back to you :)
DeleteOohh .. this gave me the chills...
ReplyDeleteOh "Hat" a poem that I wrote gave you chills? Well now I have chills. Are you doing NaNo - if you want to help each other out (just with some rah rah cheers email me at drpkp.com ... or not as you wish). Not sure how far I'm getting this year round.
DeleteThis is excellent, Pearl - one of your best, I think. Tying the full moon to Sandy had crossed my mind too (they say that if she had hit during the full moon the flooding would have been even worse), but you ran with it and succeeded.
ReplyDeleteThaaaanks Bruce - You've been on a great run lately - Congratulations again - I appreciate your stopping and truly appreciate your comment :)))
ReplyDeleteI like the way you've structured and built this poem - the tension builds and it works well.
ReplyDeletethat's looking at Sandy in a different light... well done!
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing work... it would have been enough.. building to the passionate embrace. This one really touched me.
ReplyDeleteAm glad to know you are all right, though life in a hotel is far from being as comfy as being safe in one's home, Pearl, have been thinking of you through all the news reports of the devastation in your area.
ReplyDeleteYou excel yourself!
ReplyDeleteI am happy to know that you are fine. :)
ReplyDeleteAnd this was a beautiful poem. A pleasure to read. Brilliant imagery. Keep it up!