Down the lane barefoot, she walks
gentle footfalls soft on cool loamed earth
onto sharp-sharded alley slicing unfelt cuts
on bloodying soles, walks without squander
to the sea
Green eyes fixate-follow the navigation of her
heart hammering her intractable path
heart hammering her intractable path
to the sea
There in the newly fingered crimsoning dawn
rustled flocks of geese rise as one
rustled flocks of geese rise as one
vanished vees into molten pewter
of shimmered sky, beating
powerful wings into fresh
wet-salt scented breezes
powerful wings into fresh
wet-salt scented breezes
of this new day
filled with promises yet to keep
to the sea
to the sea
she walks with gentle footfalls
sunlight shining in tangled hair
alone, safe, free
to
the
languid
sea
waiting
with
open
to
accommodate
This stanza is gorgeous:
ReplyDeleteThere in the newly fingered crimsoning dawn
rustled flocks of geese rise as one
vanished vees into molten pewter
Gorgeous writing! So many splendid images! I loved: "her heart hammering her intractable path" and "newly fingered crimsoning dawn rustled flocks of geese rise as one vanished vees into molten pewter."
ReplyDeleteThe ending was unexpected!
Your writing is lush with sensation, Pearl. The pictures are beautiful, too.
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful. Especially lovely is "into molten pewter of shimmered sky". Sigh. I accompanied her every footfall.
ReplyDeleteone usually thinks of the sea as the one with the inexorable path, instead of one intent on reaching it. good stuff.
ReplyDeleteThis is lush, Pearl. I love the refrain "to the sea".
ReplyDeletePamela
I'm with Flaubert: 'to the sea' just keeps drawing the reader farther and farther in...
DeleteElusive Music
Beautiful imagery!
ReplyDeleteLovely as always, Dr. P.
ReplyDeleteSo visually stunning, Pearl. Love the repeating refrain and the way you separated the last few lines made it dramatic. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteThe salted air...the sea. So good for the soul. I was lucky to be at a the sea one morning off of a Maui shore...so clear, warm and inviting...Now if I could just breath under water...
ReplyDeleteMy contribution can be found here:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/04/lackluster-lackey-sunday-whirl-wordle.html
Hi .... OH MY GOODNESS... Was so busy with trying to get poems together for a collection.. a new commitment to submit something somewhere every day in the month of may and realizing I had written almost 200 poems this April for PAD challenge and saved NONE.. (don't ask ... they are now here on a separate page)... that I DID NOT SEE THESE COMMENTS!!!!
ReplyDeleteOh thank you, thank you, thank you. After an odd couple of days feeling positively 'fried' your beautiful words are like cool water on my mind....
So much appreciated :)))))))))))))