Sunday, September 4, 2011

The Sunday Whirl - Wordle 20 - In Darkness

At a slow crawl, there, pallid women
quivering under choker studded boys
claw toward hoped for hordes of help
spread there on pavemented  rack
as leathered boy-men hitch up pants
elbow each other at their 'goof' and
return raucously reeling  to the bar
while they lay, fractured-winged birdlike
waiting for sun rayed blooms


  1. Oh Pearl, this one is heart breaking. Well done, but sad.

  2. Aw thank you Brenda... I did think it was sad myself.
    The wordles are terrific word associations that fall into a scene... Enjoying them tremendously :)

  3. Very nicely done, Pearl, but very sad as well.


  4. maximum impact from a minimum of words.

  5. Harsh and rowdy situation but sad for respectable society to endure the pain of deteriorating teenagers!! Some bitter truths in your poem Doc!!

  6. Thank you much Pamela...and Viv, I very much appreciate your comment, precisely my goal when "wordling". :)

  7. What a horrible scene! Well written description of a nasty reality too many young women have endured. Makes me want to throw the lot of those boys in jail - no, make that under the jail.

  8. Nanka... yep I think there was something about the indifference in today's society playing about the edges that spilled into those whirdle words...

  9. Hi there Traci... Thank you ... for the smile picturing those created boys "under the jail"... I didn't much like them myself even as they began to take shape!