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Saturday, March 8, 2014

Boys and their donuts


Boys and their donuts

Hey Miss Motley! - we call out to you inside
"Will you leaves us a platter of them jelly donuts 
lined up like you do in a row like good soldiers. 
Nah, don’t you bother coming up to the window
we’ll all catch you later after we done celebrate
our win - Paradise in a our cotton field-trip
Your powdered sugar stays sweet on our lips
as we sprawl in the sun – and later sugar stunned
stumble home in the setting sun separating one after 
one, each and all of us forgetting as always to swing back on by
   

5 comments:

  1. Feeling of excitement in this variation ~ nice use of words

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    1. Thanks for stopping by and commenting. Much appreciated :)

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  2. Love this sweet spill, in particular:
    "and later sugar stunned
    stumble home in the setting sun"

    Gorgeous alliteration and assonance here, my friend.

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    1. Awww De - your comment is as sweet as jelly donut - Thank you so very much :)

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  3. A platter of them jelly donuts sounds delightful!

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