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Saturday, February 16, 2013

the naked bulb




the naked bulb




under the naked bulb

the pair scurries
from the imaginary flashlight
of the father, or the cop, or
the jeering faces of friends

under the naked bulb

the pair in hiding lock
the car door, fix their clothes
one friend turning to the other
hearts pounding at the root
mystified at the lack of all they had
held known before this night

under the naked bulb

when everything changed
forever

under the naked bulb










playing around with a newly invented form
4-6-2 with repeated refrain - first 2 stanzas
action driven -  final 2 lines 
resolve or explain the previously described
intensity, repeated refrain and title set mood 
and must be identical. 

4 comments:

  1. Both poems arrived intact. This has a Bonnie and Clyde feel to it.

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  2. I may (or may not) have been under that naked bulb ;)

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  3. Reminds me that sometimes we are too young for the first of many things of which we are not prepared...

    Short verse here:
    http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2013/02/sunday-whirl-96-short-elfje-quad-wave.html

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  4. Pearl, I like the refrain throughout this, it is nice.

    Pamela

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