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Sunday, December 2, 2012

an affair to forget










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an affair to forget 

it was an affair to forget
forlorn even as it was manic
cast in amber wax their
clash hewn of drive in the fuse
of desire – a fork in their ribboned
predetermined road
salted with storm-swept sand 

~

23 comments:

  1. "cast in amber wax" is beautiful and forever.

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  2. I admire the dual accomplishment of brevity and depth in your poem. Nicely done!

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  3. Succinct and rich in meaning, like truth but quicker!

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  4. There's so much going on here in just seven lines. Bravo!

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  5. Pearl, I like that last line -- salted with storm-swept sand! Always good to see you in the "Pantry."

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    1. I second Mary's appraisal of that last line. I think it's wondrously wrought.

      A Little Whirl with Stanley

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  6. I want to echo Wabi Sabi! Great depth and brevity!

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  7. Powerful writing. Love the last line especially.

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  8. Concise piece, Pearl. So few words, that say so much.

    Pamela

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  9. Don't you DARE sell yourself short! This is a great piece of concise writing - very powerful! I am terrible at getting to other people's blogs and commenting lately - I am in the midst of preparing two books, plus trying to keep up with two blogs! My apologies for not dropping by and commenting. Keep writing, wordling, whatever. . .just stay at it! You will be noticed, I guarantee it! I'll sign up and follow you!

    Paula

    http://paulatohlinecalhoun1951.wordpress.com/2012/12/02/a-grizzly-bit-of-fun-wordle-85/

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    1. Oh my thank you so very much Paula - (I was actually named Pauline/Paula for my first day on this spinning blue marble).

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  10. Your brevity w/ the wordle words proves your poetic ability, Pearl... you are very talented. I especially like:

    cast in amber wax their
    clash

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  11. I particularly like the salted and storm swept sand. Lovely image.

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  12. This is so strong even though it is brief. You are without doubt a very talented versifier.

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  13. You say so much with so few words. Well done.

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  14. straight to the point, without a lot of extraneous words - talk about economy! nicely writ.

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  15. Let's try this again ... cut myself off again! This is glorious (and so succinct which always makes me a tad envious) - and I love the photo - was wondering if it's a Sandy "splash"? Very cool poem Pearl.

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  16. Posted my feelings over at the Whirl page, but wanted to chime in here at the source. Your work has to be good. We share the same thoughts from time to time. ;) Nicely done, Doctor!

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  17. Lost my comments. Trying again. There's no doubt about your skills as I had attested at the Whirl page. Besides, we think the same thoughts at times, so we have this thing covered between us. Nicely done, Doctor!

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  18. WOW! You guys have made my evening! So many delicious comments - that I am sure to have sweet dreams. THANK YOU so very very much - you truly have made my night :))))))

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  19. Brief and powerful, with well-turned phrases.

    This is the only truly minimalist piece I've seen so far on this prompt.

    Alas, I couldn't find FIND.

    Cheers!
    JzB

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  20. Thanks again Jazzbumpa and Rosemary - I'm having a bit of an internet problem here so keeping my reply short but nevertheless please know I am grateful for your comments :)))

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