Sunday, January 6, 2013

awake

Starry Night by Vera Kratochvil







awake


"awake, listen," she whispered
in giddy-voice her
very breath spilling
a tumult venture
dragging them by an
arm or leg toward a bitter
venture with a step rank
with practice
"awake, listen" she whispered
eyes glitter burning fire-
clarity solely within,
as two
small children involitionally
stumbled, barefoot
out into the starlit night 





Posted by Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP) at 4:14 AM
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22 comments:

  1. Stan SkiJanuary 6, 2013 at 4:46 AM

    I'm awake, and listening... and it's sounding good!

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  2. annell4January 6, 2013 at 5:32 AM

    I have been there many nights. I love the starry night.

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  3. vivinfranceJanuary 6, 2013 at 6:37 AM

    what a gorgeous word: involitionally

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  4. ScottlBJanuary 6, 2013 at 6:42 AM

    Methinks the night goes not well.

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  5. Preeti S.January 6, 2013 at 7:59 AM

    Beautiful..

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  6. Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP)January 6, 2013 at 9:18 AM

    Okay, I just added a couple of words to this poem ... "eyes GLITTER burning" and "clarity SOLELY" within... as it seemed most readers were seeing this with quite a different tone..

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  7. ElizabethJanuary 6, 2013 at 9:21 AM

    Me thinks there is a threat in this starry night (bitter venture)and those children are not eager to partake in rank practice.

    Elizabeth

    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/01/06/living-lesson/

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  8. teriJanuary 6, 2013 at 9:33 AM

    Your piece evokes that night time -stirred awake feeling. Trying to listen through all that darkness.

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  9. AnonymousJanuary 6, 2013 at 11:40 AM

    I love the excitement of this, the exuberance of being in the moment and how resistant and lack luster the children are, barely awake in the midst of the action.
    Just exquisite!

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  10. Marian VeverkaJanuary 6, 2013 at 11:49 AM

    Me also thinks watch out kiddies! Nicely understated.

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  11. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 6, 2013 at 12:50 PM

    Those children sound very vulnerable. I see the beauty of the sky, yet worry about the little ones.

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  12. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerJanuary 6, 2013 at 2:53 PM

    Watch out kidlets--the night may be more than it seems!

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  13. UnknownJanuary 6, 2013 at 3:26 PM

    And I can see them stumble, hear their feet and giggles. And I like it.

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  14. brenda wJanuary 6, 2013 at 3:27 PM

    yup. watch out! but love the sky...I wonder of the dangers that await, and hope the woman bodes well.

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  15. S.E.IngrahamJanuary 6, 2013 at 3:51 PM

    so lovely - reminds me both of Van Gogh's "Starry Night" and the song written about it, "Vincent" by Don McLean (sp?)

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    1. Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP)January 6, 2013 at 7:54 PM

      That's quite a compliment. M'dear ...floating off to bed now .... Thsnk you :)

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  16. Madeleine Begun KaneJanuary 7, 2013 at 1:12 AM

    Beautifully done!

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  17. JulesJanuary 7, 2013 at 7:00 AM

    I can almost see a story starting - children woken perhaps on a trip in the Underground Railroad - escaping into the night and into freedom.

    Could be just stare gazing :)

    Thanks for your visit.

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  18. Tumblewords:January 7, 2013 at 7:58 PM

    Ah, yes, see the starry night!

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  19. Mariya KolevaJanuary 7, 2013 at 11:09 PM

    Wonderful, almost magic! I like the repetition of the "Awake. Listen" mantra and the final line. <3

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