in the Cobalt Align the child did hook, quiet sweet child, in the vast vibrate print her vision in the Cobalt Align, grind her tiny white teeth, bright contrast against her celestial playroom returning to hook again and again until emerging in the inky clear Cobalt Align there at first a specked dot, later a wink of light and the hint of tumbled laughter twinkling, tinkling as one by one all hung in place, sweet child, delicately fingered by cautioned care, repeated with intense concentration all that unnumbered afternoon until the night sky sparkled with brilliance of a billion stars and the child clapped softly with pleasure in the pure cosmic clarity of the Cobalt Align.... as the tiny ones looked on far below smiling with upturned faces shining with speculated wonder at the order of a velvet sky lit with stars like sequins hooked by a careful child into fabric
OR - ALTERNATE ....
in the Cobalt Align
in the
Cobalt Align
the child
did hook,
quiet
sweet child,
in the
vast vibrate
print her
vision
in the Cobalt Align,
grind her
tiny white
teeth,
bright contrast
against
her celestial
playroom
returning
to hook
again and
again
until
emerging
in the
inky clear
Cobalt Align
there, at
first a specked
dot,
later a wink
of
light
and the
hint of
tumbled
laughter
twinkling,
tinkling
as one by
one
all hung
in place,
sweet
child, delicately
fingered
by cautioned care,
repeated
with
intense
concentration
all
that unnumbered afternoon
until the
night sky
sparkled
with brilliance
of a
billion stars
and the
child clapped
softly
with pleasure in
the
pure cosmic clarity
of
the Cobalt Align....
as the
tiny ones looked
on far
below
smiling
with
upturned faces
shining
with
speculated wonder
at the
order
of a
velvet sky
lit with
stars like
sequins hooked
by a
careful child into
fabric
strange but beautiful
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. I liked them both. The sky does hold some fabulous magic and mystery doesn't it!
ReplyDeleteThis poem has a mystical feel to it!
ReplyDeleteI love this, Pearl. The second version read more easily for me...but the first one primed me for it, and heightened my enjoyment. Excellent word play, and story.
ReplyDeleteI really like this poem, and I like the line breaks of version 2 best!
ReplyDeleteIt interests me that we both chose star pictures as illustrations for our poems. The words have a "cosmic" feel to them, I think.
I had a difficult time utilizing the word "cobalt." It is a task to use the words without them standing out like a sore thumb. I try when writing these Wordle poems to write them in such a way that no one reading them would know I was incorporating specific words. I want the poem to flow naturally. You succeeded with that brilliantly. My use of cobalt did not turn out so well and seamlessly. The fact that you repeated it made it seem a true part of the poem.
Thanks for sharing, and I hope you got some rest! here's my entry:
http://paulatohlinecalhoun1951.wordpress.com/2012/05/06/receiving-birth/
Paula
Your inimitable style does intrigue and express...as always. Quite the journey, Pearl.
ReplyDeleteVery nice.
I love that last line-"Like sequins hooked by a careful child into fabric." You were able to stretch out into the stars and capture a mystery. I am thinking we may find the Cobalt Align somewhere in the wordle galaxy.
ReplyDeleteI see in the great cosmos the parent beings allowing the child the task to decorate the sky for those here on earth to see...
ReplyDeleteCarefully all our day working, so when the velvet night arrives we can see the full joy of that creation. Kind of like finger painting but with a learned (or not) pattern.
Nicely wordled!
Gorgeous! Gorgeous!! esp. love 'delicately fingered by cautioned care,'...and then the enchanting ending...'as the tiny ones looked
ReplyDeleteon far below
smiling
with upturned faces
shining
with speculated wonder
at the order
of a velvet sky
lit with stars l
ike sequins hooked
by a careful child into
fabric'..WOW~
Very nice Pearl and I like version 2 best which will come as little surprise ... I love that you made a whole different cosmos, the Cobalt Align ... great weaving of the words - I forgot it was a wordle ...
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OH MY GOODNESS!!!! I've been really down and out sick as the proverbial dog (why a dog I always wondered ... I've never seen a dog with a sore throat!!)... At any rate just took a peek at e-mail and read all these wonderful comments. I am feverish, and now feverish with appreciation I would gather you all up and squoosh you in a big hug...but even if I could I wouldn't want to give you my annual welcome to a new season "sick." THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU... You each and all have hung stars in my heart! :)
ReplyDeleteI hope you feel better soon- ((*)) hugs
DeleteOh thank you Teri! :) <3
DeleteGather me in too, Pearl, I like hugs!! Thank you! I am late making rounds but I really enjoy your offering for the wordle. I especially liked this line:
ReplyDelete"Your tranquility
is a little dot of cloud
on the horizon."
and your closing about the stars as sequins is a striking image! Great fun with these, Pearl!
Oh, yes and a link to mine if you'd like... http://wordrustling.wordpress.com/2012/05/08/resurgence/
ReplyDeleteOooh thank you Hannah... Come on into this embrace ... Thank you for the link and the love :)
ReplyDeleteYou entreat your reader to dip a toe, or two, into the cobalt...
ReplyDeleteOooh thank you Kim what a lovely poetic comment!!!
DeletePearl, I nominated you for the The Versitile Blogger's Award. (That means you win!) ^_^ Come see: http://dianaterrill.wordpress.com/2012/05/12/awards-no-way/
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