Time bend or The Railroad Goes
Miss the bits of you-
blue smoke drifting
parenthetical arcs
around your words -
Miss all you turned
my head to see
waiting
until I saw -
the flat calm
of a lake at sunrise -
the brilliant flash
of a jay's cocked eye -
watching -
all of it -
leaks
in the solid
temple that was you -
left
I swing
between each sense
of you - off track -
your smoke trailing over the
horizon - as you clatter off
heading toward an unseen
curve - a dip -an ultimate
vanishment-
until then -
I miss the bits and
hold the smoke ...
Pain and longings so beautifully expressed...
ReplyDeleteSuch longing... but there is also a bit of hope... held in the smoke.
ReplyDeleteLove how you describe the longing as the smoke, I wonder if it isn't often like that.
ReplyDeleteLove this - such a beautifully tender and touching poem!❤️
ReplyDeleteI love trains and the mystique of them heading off to places unknown.......here, train travel is now prohibitive, sadly. Too expensive for most. But I remember the sound and rhythm of the clickety clack along the tracks when I was young.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful ode to the rails!
ReplyDeleteI love the visual imagery - beautiful writing!
ReplyDeleteThe last bit about holding smoke drives home the impermanence of this love affair.
ReplyDeleteYou have expressed the feeling of missing in a very unique way...."I miss the bits and hold the smoke" is inspired!
ReplyDeleteWell composed painting of words
ReplyDeleteBeautifully nostalgic.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a poignant tale of of love and longing.
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ReplyDeleteImaginative uses of the words, indeed.
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