Back Over the Hill
Oh yes just a gimmick – she thinks as trains of
images clatter through to tease
- hypnotizing her
with loosed chickens of lust
clucking cacophony
on-the-other-side-of-the-road
– here, over the hill –
her flesh scratchy-sere, demanding truth from purring
lotion-potion promises - sweet words to halt the torture machine
her flesh scratchy-sere, demanding truth from purring
lotion-potion promises - sweet words to halt the torture machine
in which she fell - entangled, snared as surely
as a worker-bee's uniform caught in
the gears – this lotion-
potion sure to loose her from the
liquor non-sense of this
suddenly slack body, these veiny
hands, this wrinkled brow,
these tired eyes suddenly lifting in hope born
on the scent of lavender lotion massaging in backward circles-
as all quiets – chickens and trains fall still, and she
inhales deeply -
eyes closing, closing - closed
falling back
into her true -self
on a sigh
smiling
these tired eyes suddenly lifting in hope born
on the scent of lavender lotion massaging in backward circles-
as all quiets – chickens and trains fall still, and she
inhales deeply -
eyes closing, closing - closed
falling back
into her true -self
on a sigh
smiling
Lotion potion promises -- divine..as is that final smile :)
ReplyDeleteI like it...the lotion, brought some many words to mind, but I think I completely gave up on the chicken?
ReplyDeleteLove this, particularly:
ReplyDeletefalling back
into her true -self
on a sigh
smiling
I hold on to falling back into her true self... Beautiful!
I liked the way you wrote the disturbing stream of consciousness of her thoughts, but the tension was relieved when at the ending she fell back into her true self and smiled.
ReplyDeleteI'm relieved that this poem ends with a smile. In the beginning, I was expecting the worst!
ReplyDeleteWhirling with Alberto
I agree with Jae Rose - lotion potion is a great word-combo
ReplyDeleteWell wordled. I love your lotion potion promises - which remind me of those inane Loreal ads because she's worth it!
ReplyDeletethe poem starts almost like surrealist poem but it end so beautiful.
ReplyDeleteHow you tease our imagination with such surreal images. To me I could see a lady of the night finding redemption somehow to be the woman she longed for.
ReplyDeleteWhat a trip you have set for your reader...the cacophony of life that ends on the smile and stillness.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
So many gorgeous phrases and images...as a worker-bee's uniform caught in the gears – this is just one of my favourites...a wonderful poem Pearl
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great wordle love how you fiddled the so nicely!
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