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Sunday, October 16, 2011

Wordle #26.  DANCE IN THE SHALLOWS



It was in The Shallows
long ago a distant crush gathered in
the song of dancing music
trembling the earth as the girl feet
already sore stumbled forward in the dark
thinking of simpler days of running hoops
as he burst as a bolt from nowhere beside her
grabbing roughly her fancy dressed shoulder
she topples broken into the dust of never
forgive, causes kept in the tremble of
the earth and the music faded long ago
consigned all to this single dangled drop of time
in The Shallows long ago  

9 comments:

  1. I like the phrasing of "as the girl feet already sore stumbled forward in the dark."
    This is an excellent contribution, Pearl.

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  2. Thank you Brenda.... You've kicked off my Sunday with a :)

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  3. "This single, dangled drop of time." A truly sharp focus for a single dance in a single place on a single night. Nice internal rhyme and alliteration too.

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  4. Pearl, I like this and my favourite part is...

    "consigned all to this single dangled drop of time"

    It says so much.

    Pamela

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  5. Whoops Flaubert I can no longer click on your name and reach your site... Do you want your settings this way?

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  6. I am glad I landed up here to read your beautiful poem!

    hanging my head

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