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Saturday, October 10, 2015

Still




Still 

Still in watery predawn light spilling
into the shudder-shimmer of silence - 
All gone home - carrying surreptitious 
gifts stuffed under coats improvising 
condolences from planned-canned-
canceled-congratulations - stumbling
smiles slipping from mouth corners -
All gone now - all silent in this watery 
undawned light - and you - stillborn -
somewhere - still 


5 comments:

  1. The stillborn ending made me feel I want some songs to fill the stillness.

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  2. There's a hint of weighty sadness in those last two lines. And especially loved the resonance of the second line.

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  3. Marvellous use of alliterative phrases. I especially admire the change of mood in the last 3 lines. 'watery undawned light' is brilliant!

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  4. Beautifully done. I feel quite sad.
    Anna :o]

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