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Saturday, May 5, 2012

in the Cobalt Align



in the Cobalt Align  the child did hook, quiet sweet child, in the vast vibrate print her vision in the Cobalt Align, grind her tiny white teeth, bright contrast against her celestial  playroom returning to hook again and again until emerging  in the inky clear Cobalt Align  there at first a specked dot, later a wink of light  and the hint of tumbled laughter twinkling, tinkling  as one by one  all hung in place,  sweet child, delicately fingered by cautioned care, repeated with intense concentration  all that unnumbered afternoon until the night sky  sparkled with brilliance  of a billion stars and the child clapped softly with pleasure in the pure cosmic clarity  of the Cobalt Align.... as the tiny ones looked on far below  smiling with upturned faces shining  with speculated wonder at the order of a velvet sky lit with stars  like sequins hooked by a careful child into fabric





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in the Cobalt Align

in the Cobalt Align 
the child did hook,
quiet sweet child,
in the vast vibrate
print her vision
in the Cobalt Align,
grind her tiny white
teeth, bright contrast
against her celestial 
playroom
returning to hook
again and again
until emerging 
in the inky clear
Cobalt Align 
there, at first a specked
dot, later a wink
of light 
and the hint of
tumbled laughter
twinkling, tinkling 
as one by one 
all hung in place, 
sweet child, delicately
fingered by cautioned care,
repeated with
intense concentration 
all that unnumbered afternoon
until the night sky 
sparkled with brilliance 
of a billion stars
and the child clapped
softly with pleasure in
the pure cosmic clarity 
of the Cobalt Align....
as the tiny ones looked
on far below 
smiling
with upturned faces
shining 
with speculated wonder
at the order
of a velvet sky
lit with stars like 
sequins hooked
by a careful child into
fabric













19 comments:

  1. Beautiful. I liked them both. The sky does hold some fabulous magic and mystery doesn't it!

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  2. This poem has a mystical feel to it!

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  3. I love this, Pearl. The second version read more easily for me...but the first one primed me for it, and heightened my enjoyment. Excellent word play, and story.

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  4. I really like this poem, and I like the line breaks of version 2 best!

    It interests me that we both chose star pictures as illustrations for our poems. The words have a "cosmic" feel to them, I think.

    I had a difficult time utilizing the word "cobalt." It is a task to use the words without them standing out like a sore thumb. I try when writing these Wordle poems to write them in such a way that no one reading them would know I was incorporating specific words. I want the poem to flow naturally. You succeeded with that brilliantly. My use of cobalt did not turn out so well and seamlessly. The fact that you repeated it made it seem a true part of the poem.

    Thanks for sharing, and I hope you got some rest! here's my entry:

    http://paulatohlinecalhoun1951.wordpress.com/2012/05/06/receiving-birth/

    Paula

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  5. Your inimitable style does intrigue and express...as always. Quite the journey, Pearl.
    Very nice.

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  6. I love that last line-"Like sequins hooked by a careful child into fabric." You were able to stretch out into the stars and capture a mystery. I am thinking we may find the Cobalt Align somewhere in the wordle galaxy.

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  7. I see in the great cosmos the parent beings allowing the child the task to decorate the sky for those here on earth to see...
    Carefully all our day working, so when the velvet night arrives we can see the full joy of that creation. Kind of like finger painting but with a learned (or not) pattern.
    Nicely wordled!

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  8. Gorgeous! Gorgeous!! esp. love 'delicately fingered by cautioned care,'...and then the enchanting ending...'as the tiny ones looked
    on far below
    smiling
    with upturned faces
    shining
    with speculated wonder
    at the order
    of a velvet sky
    lit with stars l
    ike sequins hooked
    by a careful child into
    fabric'..WOW~

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  9. Very nice Pearl and I like version 2 best which will come as little surprise ... I love that you made a whole different cosmos, the Cobalt Align ... great weaving of the words - I forgot it was a wordle ...

    http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2012/05/things-of-which-we-believe-ourselves.html

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  10. OH MY GOODNESS!!!! I've been really down and out sick as the proverbial dog (why a dog I always wondered ... I've never seen a dog with a sore throat!!)... At any rate just took a peek at e-mail and read all these wonderful comments. I am feverish, and now feverish with appreciation I would gather you all up and squoosh you in a big hug...but even if I could I wouldn't want to give you my annual welcome to a new season "sick." THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU... You each and all have hung stars in my heart! :)

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  11. Gather me in too, Pearl, I like hugs!! Thank you! I am late making rounds but I really enjoy your offering for the wordle. I especially liked this line:

    "Your tranquility
    is a little dot of cloud
    on the horizon."

    and your closing about the stars as sequins is a striking image! Great fun with these, Pearl!

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  12. Oh, yes and a link to mine if you'd like... http://wordrustling.wordpress.com/2012/05/08/resurgence/

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  13. Oooh thank you Hannah... Come on into this embrace ... Thank you for the link and the love :)

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  14. You entreat your reader to dip a toe, or two, into the cobalt...

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    1. Oooh thank you Kim what a lovely poetic comment!!!

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  15. Pearl, I nominated you for the The Versitile Blogger's Award. (That means you win!) ^_^ Come see: http://dianaterrill.wordpress.com/2012/05/12/awards-no-way/

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